Defend Your Paper: SOC 101 EssayMaya Chen • Intro to Sociology (SOC 101) • 9 min · voice • Draft · awaiting your approval
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Overall PerformanceGrade
Excellent · 89Maya, you defended your essay with real confidence. You stated your thesis in one clear sentence and explained exactly what Twenge’s study measured and why it supports your claim. When asked about reverse causation you first said “I guess it could go both ways,” and with one follow-up you began building a strong answer. For your next paper, prepare a response to the strongest counterargument in advance, and connect your claim to course concepts like social isolation and social capital.
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Clear Central ClaimGrade
Excellent · 98You opened with a precise claim: “social media replaces face-to-face time for teens rather than adding to it.” You held it consistently through every follow-up and showed how each section of your essay supports it.
Use of EvidenceGrade
Excellent · 96You described Twenge’s study accurately, tracking daily screen time against how often teens saw friends in person, and you explained why that comparison matters for your argument.
Answering the CounterargumentGrade
Developing · 72Asked whether lonely teens simply use social media more, you suggested following the same teens over time to see which comes first. That’s a strong instinct; developing it into a full rebuttal will make your essay much harder to challenge.
Applying Course ConceptsGrade
Developing · 74You spoke about loneliness throughout. Linking it to the course’s ideas of social isolation and social capital would turn a good argument into a sociological one.